Friday, November 30, 2012

Taking




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( Art Done by Anonymous)

POEM #3

These empty hands,
Are they giving nothing,
Or asking for all,
Greedy,
Rough,
Cupped together,
But at who,
Or for what,
The green grass,
Is he asking Mother Nature,
Wanting more than what we already take,
We steal,
Strip,
We give nothing back,
After so much taking,
We don't even have unless,
All we have is if,
No hope,
No future,
Nothing.



PARAGRAPHS 
I really love writing poetry. It's very entertaining and though they may not be great the words come easy. In class we were revising our poems and I realized I didn't Chang much but that's just because once I start something and I think it works or is good its hard for me to change it, obviously there were some things that I changed, or that I just got rid of because I didn't like it, but I would say having to revise my poems were the hardest thing about them. My favorite of the three poems, is well either the one about the moon landing or the Harry potter one- I like the first one because its interesting even though it is kind of negative which wasn't my outcome in the beginning. I also like the latter of the two because it's fun and simple. My least favorite was the poem about the art piece because I hate someone making me write poetry it really just kills the point of it at all.

I added style to my poems with sentence structure, diction, and voice. The voice to my poems actually ended up being slightly negative, which wasn't really my outcome but the diction I used really made it seem that way, there were probably more positive words to use, but I like what I did. And last but not least i feel that my sentence structure was really conversational, because I used shorter sentences, and mostly because of the  words like we, I, and you that I use a lot. 

1 comment:

  1. Dear Sarah,
    I really liked your poem "Taking" because it leaves you wondering. One line you wrote that stands out to me is: "wanting more than we already take" because it seems people are always so greedy for more when they already have so much. The poem seems to be talking about that throughout, actually. I agree with the way you used voice in this poem because it really goes with the theme I see in it. It casts a negative light on the way people are so greedy. Thanks for your writing! I look forward to what you write next because I liked this poem and your writing is good.

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