( Art Done by Anonymous)
POEM #3
These empty hands,
Are they giving nothing,
Or asking for all,
Greedy,
Rough,
Cupped together,
But at who,
Or for what,
The green grass,
Is he asking Mother Nature,
Wanting more than what we already take,
We steal,
Strip,
We give nothing back,
After so much taking,
We don't even have unless,
All we have is if,
No hope,
No future,
Nothing.
PARAGRAPHS
I really love writing poetry. It's very entertaining and though
they may not be great the words come easy. In class we were revising our poems
and I realized I didn't Chang much but that's just because once I start
something and I think it works or is good its hard for me to change it,
obviously there were some things that I changed, or that I just got rid of
because I didn't like it, but I would say having to revise my poems were the
hardest thing about them. My favorite of the three poems, is well either the
one about the moon landing or the Harry potter one- I like the first one
because its interesting even though it is kind of negative which wasn't my
outcome in the beginning. I also like the latter of the two because it's fun
and simple. My least favorite was the poem about the art piece because I hate
someone making me write poetry it really just kills the point of it at all.
I added style to my poems with sentence structure, diction, and
voice. The voice to my poems actually ended up being slightly negative, which
wasn't really my outcome but the diction I used really made it seem that way,
there were probably more positive words to use, but I like what I did. And last
but not least i feel that my sentence structure was really conversational,
because I used shorter sentences, and mostly because of the words like we, I, and you that I use a
lot.
